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The Message From The Undead
ReplyDeleteOn September 9th 1989, Stacy was in her bedroom listening to music. She felt energetic so she decided to go outside and take a walk. It was night time.
“Mom i’m going outside for a walk” Stacy said
“ Make sure to put on a jacket” Yelled Mom
So Stacy headed outside. She walk about 10 minutes and saw someone in the woods.
“Hello? Who are you?” Questioned Stacy
When that person turned around Stacy flinched
“What are you?” Stacy mumbled
“I am a Zombie I was sent here to tell you a message”
“Don’t be scared I won’t eat you”
And so Stacy calmed down a little and listened to what the Zombie had to say.
“You must not tell anyone I came here now I must go”
As Stacy walked home she thought about what the zombie said.
She got home and went to bed.
Not to be rude, but there should be use of vocabulary words in there. You should add more details on what the message is. Other than that it's good.
DeleteWell she can keep the message like a mystery for us Brandon and there should be at least one or two vocabulary words in there. I love this story by the way!
DeleteCan we put fake people?
DeleteBy the way your story was awsome Cindy
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ReplyDeleteThe Dead ALive
It was a sinister night in New Orleans. Trees are swaying, it is very foggy, and it’s drizzling outside. It was not a good day for Nikki Ford either. Nikki had just moved to New Orleans a couple of months ago. She misses her friends, especially Paige. Paige was Nikki’s best friend, but since Nikki moved, she has no one but her parents and her sister.
Nikki was on her way to the woods to pick up some apples and berries for her family. The part of the woods where she was heading was very far from her cabin. No one was with her. The part of the woods seems like it’s in the middle of nowhere. It was considerable for her parents to chose her sister, Brie, instead of Nikki to go to the part of the woods.
“What was that?” Nikki asked herself. It sounded like someone was on her shoulder. She ran like the wind. The branches were breaking every time she stepped on them. You can hear nothing but them man following her. All of a sudden there’s silence. Nikki is lost! The man following her got her distracted, so now she doesn’t even know where she is. Nikki asked herself ideas about the man.
“Why was the man moaning?” asked Nikki. “Why is he in the woods?” she continued. Why does it seem like he runs very slow. “That doesn’t matter, what is important is finding my way home.”
She continued to follow her way back to her cabin. She hears the moaning again.
“Hello?” Nikki asked. “Is someone there?”
“UUUUUH” said the man moaning.
“No it can’t be, not a zombie!” said Nikki. Nikki and the zombie stare at each other. “Why are you her?” Nikki asked. “Are you stalking me?” said curiously.
“BRAINS!” said the zombie.
“AHHH!” said Nikki. Nikki runs. The zombie chases after her.
“Nikki, stop!” screams the zombie.
“Who are you? How do you know me?” asks Nikki.
The person removes the mask. Nikki is in shock
“Paige?!” says Nikki.
“It’s me!” Paige replies.
“Why are you hear?” asks Nikki
“I’m living in New Orleans now, several cabins far away from yours”.
“OH MY GOSH! My best friend is here with me!” said Nikki happily. Both NIkki and Paige run to their cabins as they are happy that they are together.
Sorry, but there's supposed to be an actual zombie with a message and there's not a connection to the topic about a zombie and a message from it.
DeleteIt doesn't have to be about a zombie
DeleteThe zombie's message is saying that Paige is living in New Orleans now.
DeleteI doesn't make much sense to me because Paige said it not the zombie
DeleteAnd yes, it does have to be a zombie Brandon
DeleteHe included an plot twist.
DeleteNot to be mean or anything, but you spelled here wrong.
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ReplyDeleteThere need's to be a message from the zombie that warned people and that they were like nice to give us a warning about something terrible going to happen
DeleteAt least I think that
Deletealso you can have a messanger
DeleteWhich is the zombie
DeleteA guy in the forest,always walking...never stopping.Every few minutes you would hear something.Latrr you would hear something.Later you would here AHHHHHH!Would you dare to go in?I bet you would cry,no I know you will cry.Never go in there!Or else...
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ReplyDeleteThe Dream of the Zombie Messenger: A warning from the unlife
Bang, bang, bang! Someone was banging on the door, or was it something?”I’m coming!” Sally’s father called out, but when he peeked through the the window next to the door he saw that there was a...zombie! The zombie looked exactly like him and started to speak but he couldn’t understand the zombie and was afraid that the zombie would hurt her daughter, Sally. He looked past the zombie to see if anybody was seeing the zombie and to his surprise there was no one in the neighborhood but everything was burned in the woods on the left side of the window and on the right side the neighborhood was empty and all of the people that used to live there were zombies! For a moment there was silence. Then a little girl came, she looked like Sally, but zombie version.”Sally what happened to you?” he said as he backed away from the girl. As if he wasn’t there, she opened the door. “ Don’t worry sir,” the zombie said to him ”This is the future, where the undead rise again , but may I warn you there will be no human left after the great horror, where there was an egotistical person that created machines that were much better than humans he, until the war of man and machine began. and guess who won? Be careful and warn your people.” ”I will.” the father said and woke up from his dream, and walked to the woods...
The journey of a man in the forest
ReplyDeleteOne evening the camper decided to take one more journey in the forest before he leaves. But just as he starts a zombie sees him and wants to warn him but does not want to be seen because he thinks it will scare him. ' Hey you don't go there , there is a siberian tiger up front! yelled the zombie.
Who are you and where are you? " I am here to save you and warn you that there is a siberian tiger waiting up front for someone to come and be eaten". Oh ok , umm thanks? And thats where the journey end for the camper .
The zombies message by Sahil Forhad
ReplyDeleteOne night three friends named Sam, Rob and Kelvin were hiking in the forest. They had a map along with them and they wanted to go to a specific beautiful waterfall in the center of the forest.
They had never been their before and the people who have never returned. But they were they not scared instead they were brave and wanted to go. Except Rob who kept telling his friends this is a bad idea and we don’t know what’s on that side.
So they hiked and hiked and eventually reached the fall, it was the most amazing thing that they had ever seen. The moon shining on crystal clear water flowing down into the river. Plants everywhere and animals eating. But then Rob said it was getting late and that they should go home but the other two were consumed by the grand beauty of the fall.
Then suddenly they saw a weird object in the sky flying in light speed over the falls. The spaceship looking thing somehow landed in the water. The sliding door opened and out came a parade of steam. A person was coming out holding a piece of paper but soon the boys found out it was actually a zombie. The boys ran as fast as they could and Ricky was freaking out the most. The zombie was coming but Rob fell down and got stuck on a twig. The zombie dropped the piece of paper and went away. The paper said that THE WORLD WOULD END.
The Future of the Undead Ruse
ReplyDeleteOctober 17, 2026
“Ahhh” Jerry screamed
“Wait! I’m not here to hurt you, just to tell you something” the Zombie exclaimed
4 hours earlier
“Go out to get some firewood for the house, Jerry!” Jerry’s dad exclaimed
“Ok, I will probably be back in 30 minutes to 1 hour” Jerry responded
Jerry grabs his tools and then sets off.
“Bye everyone!” Jerry said
Jerry heard some rustling in the bushed but thought it was only the wind. He grabs some firewood from the ground. He hears something out of the ordinary.
“Who’s out there?” Jerry yelled
“I’m coming” Something responded
“WHO?” Jerry screamed
Jerry thought he heard “brains…” and he started running away from the voice. He ran all the way back home but he was lost. There was too much fog in order to see anything. He grabbed a sharp stick and went against a little cave. He kept quiet.
“Was that a zombie I just Heard?” He thought
He saw him and from that point on, he was about to faint. He heard something in the cave and thought there were multiple zombies and ran straight out.
“Hey, it’s not what it seems” he exclaimed
“Why are you here then?” Jerry responded
“I needed to tell you something” he said
“What?” Jerry exclaimed
“Don’t worry about the future, I don’t have a lot of time” he answered
“What do you mean?”
He disappears. The fog goes away and he goes back home. He doesn’t mention anything to anyone he knows.
The World Of The Dead
ReplyDeleteIt was a supernatural night in New Orleans. People were outside walking around doing nothing. One night a group of 7 kids came out of there house. They were Chloe, kennedy, Brandon, Shasha, Cynthia, Danny, and Jennifer. They all sneaked out of there and went to the road.
While they were walking they saw a supernatural creature. A ZOMBIE.
“ Is that a zombie” Kennedy asked. “ Nope i don’t think so” Brandon asked. “ Then what is coming this way” Danny asked.
They started sprinting back home but.... They zombie came running toward them.
They got to Cynthia house and talked about what was there.
“Hey guys did you know what we saw before” Jennifer said
“I am sure it was a zombie” Brandon said
They all agreed to go outside and find the zombie. Brandon said that he will apply his new Karate skills to fight zombie.
They all went out to the door and saw the zombie outside of cynthia house.
“AHHHHHHHHHHH” They all screamed. they smacked the door close but the zombie came into the house.
They ran into the woods and hid in a cabin where no one lived in. They stayed in there and waited to see if the zombie came. When they didn't she the zombie they ran until there was a dead end.
The zombie came and had an envelope they opened it and read it.
There would be a town of zombie living in New orleans. It says to pack up their things and leave town to new york city.
P.S./I.S.102Q Nia Alcaraz
ReplyDelete6-401 The Friendly Zombie and the Messanger November 15, 2015
There once lived a zombie in the depths of the earth, he had a name, Pat. He was sent to the surface to live a good life it was his choice so he went up. The next day a girl named Julia she was walking one day and she heard a noise and it was screaming all she heard was “ahhhhh ahhhhh”, “help us”, “we are all doomed”, she approached the place where the people are screaming. It was a man in a booth she went over and asked “what did you say to these people”
They were still screaming, and the man said “there will be a rise of the dead”. Julie didn’t believe the man so she just walked right back home thinking about pink fluffy unicorns. That night she heard a noise coming from her backyard which was leading to the woods, she got scared and doubted if the man in the booth is right so she went outside with a plerf gun and a flashlight and with one glance she ran back inside she saw a big hole and a man that looked all dirty because he was covered in dirt and looked all green and realized zombies are green and dirty when they come back from the dead. The man was right there was going to be a rise of the dead and so she called her parents to come look, so she ran upstairs as fast as she could and called her parents. When she went back down and only saw the hole, her parents saw and said to her “you showed us the hole you made” they also said “I'm so envious of your skill of digging holes”. So they all went back upstairs and went back to sleep except Julie she was still hearing the noise so she went outside with her phone flashlight and her plerf gun. She saw the person and squealed a bit. The zombie knew she was there so he picked up a flower, turned around and gave her the flower and she wasn't afraid from that moment and on. She got him a home but he has to be covert so he leaks around the area with a hoodie on he consumes on brains but now he eats raw meat. He loves watching the grand show cases, he wanted to achieve his dream of being on the show. That day forward Julie knew that one day everyone will face their fears of Pat.
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ReplyDeleteP.S/I.S.102 Nathaniel Cantor
ReplyDelete6-401 11/12/15
Zombie apocalypse
One day a deadly disease was spread around the world. Was it a natural disaster was? Maybe it was created for a test on an animal and bit everything that it saw? Or it could have been made for mankind by a mad scientist? Well we don’t know but we have to survive from everyone with the disease. The zombies would eat our guts for food and keep going on to the next person and on and on forever roaming the world. There would be no more people anywhere at anytime if the zombies became smarter and had a stronger smell than us they would be able to find us. Everywhere we here screams like ahhhhhhhhh!! There is no one to trust so we have to ask too many questions so they don’t use us as bait for the monsters.So all we have to do is survive the zombie apocalypse everyday until we eventually die and either get eaten or dissolve by bugs eating ever skin and bone.Before they had a chance to die a zombie came up to them, it had an envelope in it’s hands. The zombie came up and gave them the envelope it said “ You will not die and you will live with us, the zombies”.
P.S./I.S. 102Q Dennis Huang
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The Zombie’s message by Dennis Huang
On November 29, 1921, a person named Bob is going to the forest to collect wood for a camp when he went far deep in the woods he asked “who and what is that ugly person or thing?”asks Bob. Just then when he run into the zombie, he is starting to freak out and exclaims “Are you a real life zombie?!”. The zombie tells him”I am from the undead. I am not going to consume you. Please do not tell anyone that i am real.” And so, Bob went back to the camp and did not tell his fellow campers that the zombie is real. The rest of the day was normal and Bob got home safe.
The end.
! Zombies!
ReplyDeleteOne night a group of friends where going to see a movie in their friends house Mark, Zoey and Maria. They were going to watch a scary movie about Zombies. Maria was not happy about it she did not like scary movies and she was consume by fear just thinking about it. She taught to her self and said "Tonight it will be my grand achievement if I watch the whole movie without been so scared". Everyone was watching the movie Maria was so scared that she did not move. But every time a zombie come out Maria jumped from her seat. In the middle of the movie Maria notice a zombie that had a t-shirt it was rip but you can still see a message it said "Don't worry be happy" Maria read that and she started laughing and she notice that her fear was disappearing.
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ReplyDeleteThe Brainy Situation By: Maggie Chen
ReplyDeleteIt was a dark night when zombies were planning to attack Waverly Place. But one zombie named Brandon didn’t want to since he was always against evil. So he planned to go to Waverly Place to warn everybody that zombies are going to attack them and to find shelter.
“Everybody! I am Brandon and I have important news. Go hide and don’t come out until you don’t hear zombie noises!” yelled Brandon trying to warn them.
But they just ran away because when they saw the zombie, they thought he was a monster and they thought that he was going to attack them. But when really he was giving them a warning. Then Nia threw tomatoes, potatoes, a radish at Brandon.
“Ow. Why are you running from me? I’m not going to do any harm to you.” explained Brandon.
But they still didn’t believe him and hid from him until he walked back to his tribe of zombies. He was all depressed and sad when he arrived at his home.
“What’s with the long face, Brandon. We are about to eat some brains. Why aren’t you excited? We haven’t eaten in a long time.” said Max.
“I know. It’s just that we are killing innocent people when they did not do any harm to us.” explained Brandon.
Max was perplexed and didn’t care about what Brandon said because Max always thought that Brandon was stupid and meek. Brandon wasn't surprised with Max’s reaction because he was the king of the zombies. He could do anything he desires. Also max is coincide after there was a few seconds of silence after a conversation. So Brandon just left and went back to his room. Everyone was celebrating for their plan, except for Brandon. The next day the zombies were going to attack Waverly Place at night and Brandon went to warn them again.
“Hello? Anybody? I want to warn you about something. Probably you are going to throw things at me again. So I’m just going to leave this note with what I want to say. So………………..Bye.”
The people were hiding and Nia wasn’t there, so she didn’t know that Brandon left a note. When she saw him, she started throwing things at him when he was running away.
“No. It’s okay. He left a note since he knew you were going to throw things at him again.” said one of the people hiding.
“Where is the note? I want to see what he wrote.” said Nia impatiently.
“Over there on the floor.” said another person.
“Dear People of Waverly Place,
I was the zombie you saw last time and I just want to say that this is a warning about the other zombies. They want to consume your brains tonight and I just wanted to tell you to go hide from the zombies. So try to be covert.
Sincerely, Brandon (the good zombie)
p.s. That hurt, that girl who threw tomatoes, potatoes,and a radish at me”
The people who lived in Waverly Place were all panicking about what Brandon said. They started running around and screaming.
“Calm down!!! If we hide, they won’t know we are here. We just need to find a good hiding place.” Nia shouted as she was explaining what to do.
When it was night, the zombies saw that they weren’t here and just left because most of the tribe was already in pieces walking to Waverly Place. The zombies were too lazy to walk around the place and look for brains to eat. When all of the zombies turned around, everyone came out and started to throw stuff at them so that they will die.
“Don’t ever come back or else we will throw more things at you and kill more of your kinds.” yelled Nia as loud as she can.
So the zombies never returned and the people of Waverly Place was safe. But Brandon went back once in awhile to check on everyone.
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DeleteZombie News
ReplyDeleteWhat would you do for the next few seconds of your life? Have you ever been in a zombie apocalypse? Ever been so scared and not know what to do?
Hi, My name is Lauren Fantez and this all started last week walking to school thinking about the math test it was Friday the 13th. I was passing by the clubhouse and studying the ripped edges of the index cards. As I heard the sound of sirens,gun blowed , grenades and bombs.I quickly ran to the school as I heard Ms. Maroona telling me my mom`s on the phone I answer and hear “ Lauren I love you,” as the phone disconnects. I ask her teacher “ What`s happening” my teacher replies panicking “ Zombies all over get in the cafeteria”. As always I don`t listen and I runs across north I see my best friend Lucy transformed to zombie. I run back and scream “The Zombie is not a monster but had a message for us that he was coming!!” We were warned but we knew this would happen. I leave running as I see my mother ...
Being transformed and think I am nothing without her she brought me to this life know I have to see her leave. I run off to the cafeteria. I came in got the food threw it in the big moving van in the school parking lot. I leave and look back I see the world I didn't see the world I saw yesterday . I was lost. I had to leave!. I ran off to the end caught a plane and left after that day. I have a few seconds I have to do everything I can to get rid of them zombies they warned us we didn't listen. Live today don't worry about the future at least you have time.
That is an emotional story Lesly that almost made me cry
Deleteone late night something bad happen When I was at the mall a was zombie in the corner of the mall when I seen it I thought it was fake because it was not moving until it stand up try to say something, A guy said GIVE ME $25,000,000,000 or else but a guy said or else what? All he did was laugh and said an army of zombie will attack you guys and then he left all we have to do is to stop this guy.
ReplyDeleteOh, nice post! I love visiting in this blog!
ReplyDeleteI like this topic, thanks for sharing guys.
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